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I was entranced by the Sun
I decided to fly away
And follow it for fun
Little did I know my direction would change

As the Sun did set
The Moon did rise
And I did let
My gaze lose sight of the prize

As I traveled ever forward
My eyes full of this silvery disk
I angled my wings toward
Never understanding the risk

The sky became darker still
The stars and Moon did slip
Out of my sight no matter what I willed
There was a change of course on this trip

The darkness swallowed all of the light
That was left in the inky black sky
No matter how very much for it I did fight
I was left alone , not even asking why

As I was enveloped by the blackest night
Comfort within this darkness
Comfort without a seering light
My heart became filled with an aimlessness

I wondered if I would return
To the world of light
And realized I would not turn
That this course I would not fight

I decided that I would not go back
No matter what the cost
Because I did not leave tracks
And I did not leave anything behind.... I'm not lost
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Author's Comments

This one came to me while I was listening to the Nymphs "Immitating Angels". Hope you all enjoy!

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:iconshivarra:
Heather, I love this poem....

It flows well in most places, and rhymes well, and I love the originality and the concept here.

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:iconlordbeazy:
Different, original and well written. Perhaps some of the last lines a bit long, but I enjoyed the trip. :)

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Those who are good at liberating people, are also good at enslaving them. Plato.
:iconshivarra:
I didn't finish what i was saying...sorry....


I love the fact that you chose to be original and it's not a poem full of sorrow and woe, the very last line, *I'm not lost* is perfection. I love it!!! Great job my friend. :D 5 stars!!

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:iconopheliawhispers:
Thank you so very much... I just did a bit of editing on it, perhaps you might find the flow a bit better now :D

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-Ophelia

"The accumulated filth of all their sex and murder will foam up about their waist's and all the whores and politicians will look up and shout "Save Us!"

And I'll look down and whisper "No."

-Rorschach from "Watchmen"
:iconopheliawhispers:
You rule hun!

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-Ophelia

"The accumulated filth of all their sex and murder will foam up about their waist's and all the whores and politicians will look up and shout "Save Us!"

And I'll look down and whisper "No."

-Rorschach from "Watchmen"
:iconopheliawhispers:
Thank you and thanks for helping me on yim to make it flow a bit better :heart:

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-Ophelia

"The accumulated filth of all their sex and murder will foam up about their waist's and all the whores and politicians will look up and shout "Save Us!"

And I'll look down and whisper "No."

-Rorschach from "Watchmen"
:iconlordbeazy:
I read again without comparing, and yes, it did seem to flow better, so that was worth it!
And welcome. :)

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Those who are good at liberating people, are also good at enslaving them. Plato.
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Love the imagery.

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:iconopheliawhispers:
Thank you so much love!

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-Ophelia

"The accumulated filth of all their sex and murder will foam up about their waist's and all the whores and politicians will look up and shout "Save Us!"

And I'll look down and whisper "No."

-Rorschach from "Watchmen"

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